The sample chapters are here. When you’ve
read them, if you want to read the full story, let me know
and I’ll send you a link.
I want whatever comments you feel like making: any flaws you
find, and (’cause I’m insecure and whiny) a thing or two
that you like about it.
And there’s one particular area of weakness. Chicory is a
new character, introduced in the revision (or mutated from
someone much less interesting). I hope that I got her
everywhere she belongs — but please watch out for bits of
story that look as if Orpine never existed.
(And no blame if you change your mind or can’t get to it.
Though, if you change your mind, I would appreciate being
told, and you don’t need an excuse.)
Thanks very much for helping me with this! I am very